Wednesday, April 8, 2009

The hydroslide poem

H aving fun on the hydroslide
Y elling and screaming inside the tunnel
D ark pitch lack like a cave
R olling,twisting,twirling,whirling
O ur body is getting brused and banged
S hivering as we wait for mour turn
L aughing and teeth chattering
I t was freezing that our lips were turning purple
D ashing through the hydroslide
E scaping through the tunnel like your running away from the police
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6 comments:

  1. Room 10 Grey LynnMay 5, 2009 at 12:57 PM

    To Jordan,

    We liked the acrostic poem that you wrote. We thought it had lots of detail. We did poems last term too.

    From Matt, Jeru and Stella in Room 10 at Grey Lynn School

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  2. UnknownMay 5, 2009 at 7:35 PM

    Great acrostic poem Jordan! You have lots of interesting ideas shared here. keep up the good writing.
    Mrs Burt

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  3. Casey/EreneMay 25, 2009 at 9:15 AM

    Nice acrostic poem that you have written. Your writing has lots of detail and lots of hard work that makes us feel like where really there on that SCARY ride. I wonder though if you are ever going to go on the same ride next time.
    You never know, it could be soon.

    By Casey and Erene

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  4. aidanJune 2, 2009 at 9:24 AM

    hey Jordan
    cool poem that you did.It mast of been a scary slide.
    that was a great story i really enjoyed it
    from Aidan

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  5. caseyJune 4, 2009 at 9:18 AM

    Nice peom you have thier Jordon i like that poem. By Casey

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  6. marvenAugust 5, 2009 at 9:14 AM

    Sup Jordan that is a nice poem you have got there. by Marven

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